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Petra Hernandez's avatar

Thank you for the mention of February Poetry Adventure, Tara! I'm glad you are along for the Adventure and am looking forward to reading what you create. :)

This poem was really interesting. I read it as is and felt the speaker in it. That is often how I feel when I read concrete poems. I feel like I am in conversation with the poet. Then, I re-read just the left side all the way through and felt like I was hearing my own voice. I really enjoyed both versions. And the topic is a tough one to tackle. But those last five lines truly got me. So powerful. I think they will live inside my mind for a good long while.

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Mike Speriosu's avatar

Thanks for the poem and commentary. I think the presentation (whitespace, enjambment, whatever you want to call it) of a poem is certainly important. But, the level of salience varies from poem to poem. I love that a poem can be a work of auditory art, visual art, literature, and more. I just posted one myself with a strong tie to its textual form, so I used an image too.

As for the theme and content of your poem, I think I agree. Inherit some things, but let secrets lie.

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